Telling Random You-Tube Videos What For, #2

Free songwriting advice. The chorus goes "'Cause I'm a businessman, businessman. I'm a businessman. 'Cause I'm a businessman, businessman. I mean business, man."

Just that one little tweak. Well you could also say of your BMW that it's black not blue, but on the whole I think the lapse into non rhyme there is more effective than otherwise.

Good job. Keep expressing the depth of your soul through the medium of songwriting, Mr. Vilderman.

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