Free songwriting advice. The chorus goes "'Cause I'm a businessman, businessman. I'm a businessman. 'Cause I'm a businessman, businessman. I mean business, man."
Just that one little tweak. Well you could also say of your BMW that it's black not blue, but on the whole I think the lapse into non rhyme there is more effective than otherwise.
Good job. Keep expressing the depth of your soul through the medium of songwriting, Mr. Vilderman.
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